Ashley: Government: This blog was really good! I felt like you stated your opinion well and used evidence to back it up very effectively. Your very first sentence had a slight grammar issue and I think it could be fixed by saying "The creation of the United States..." very well written otherwise!
The World of Money: Finance is such a boring subject but you did a good job working with this essay! You summarized well and added you own ideas about areas have been affected by changes in finance. In your last paragraph there is one grammar mistake "...other types of financial transactions has increased..." It should be 'have' instead of 'has.' But other than that it looks good :)
Whitney: In A Perfect World: Great job with this post!! You explained libertarianism so well and also the views of those opposed to it. I liked how you explained the text and then added so much of your opinion. I realy liked your last paragraph and wish for a perfect world like you describe! I agree that until then government is probably necessary!
The Fascination With Finance: Your opening paragraph definitely gets the reader interested in what you are about to discuss. I like how you say finance combines our money obsession with risk. You explain finance well while keep it interesting.
Krista: The way you started this blog was very intriguing! It pulled me in. Discussing the Patriot Act was such a good idea. There were a couple grammar issues here and there but your ideas were great and you explained them well! We had very similar ideas about there needing to be a meeting point in the middle. I'm all for government with more of a lean to the left :)
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