You have some great ideas in your blogs and it would be great to exand even more on your own thoughts! Your posts were all great but these were my favorites! I hope they help in picking a final essay! I'm sure it'll be great!
A World Without His Foundation
First of all, I really like your title! Such a good one and it sets the reader up for what is presumably your topic! I thought you must have strong feelings about this topic after reading this blog. Your voice is very present and helps the reader see your point very clearly. With out the title I wouldn't have been sure of your thesis. From your first paragraph I wasn't sure whether you thought religion was important in determing a person's morals or not. Your second paragraph you go on to explain your view but if you did use this as your paper I would make it clear that you think religion is the most important factor in determing morals. In your last paragraph, you throw in that you think a person can still be good with out God, so that kind of throws the reader off since we thought you were trying to prove that goodness comes from religion. You can definitely go with both and pull of an awesome paper if you make it how religion can effect a person's goodness rather than how it determines it!
The Chemistry of Relationships
I enjoyed reading this blog a lot! I liked that you used an outside source to add more authority to the idea of chemistry. Though I was a little unsure as to what your stance was on the idea of chemistry determining true love from your intro paragraph. Then I got to your final paragraph where you said that you think there is more to choosing a mate then just chemicals. This is a great stance! If you were to expand on this for your final essay I would definitely make your thesis clear in the first paragraph. I would also research and add your own ideas about what exactly "it" is that also determines true love besides chemistry. I'm sure there is lots out there that could support your own ideas!
A "Mallcondo" Culture
This blog was really interesting, not only because I find the topic interesting but because you did a great job describing it! I loved the examples you used such as "
Or have you ever seen a girl fresh out of a bad break up go out and essentially get a whole new makeover to make herself feel better or give herself a sense of a new beginning." It's so true! You descriptions and examples help the reader understand where materialism comes from as well as relate to it with out feeling like a bad person for thinking materialism can be good. You do a good job of explaining both the good and bad sides of materialism. Perhaps if you were to use this as your final essay you could either choose one side or further expand on each side! I think you make good points about both so expanding on both would be an interesting read!
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