Your blogs are all very well written with no or few grammar errors! You bring up some great points and always have support to back up your views! There were a few citation issues in your blogs but you seemed to correct it in the laster posts! You're a great writer and I hope my feedback helps you pick a finaly essay topic! These were my favorites of your blogs! :)
Till "Divorce" Do Us Part
Such a clever title! Your title draws the reader in and clues us in to what you are about to discuss very effectively! This blog was very interesting and not just a regurgitation of the article! You had some great ideas in here, for example "Yes, infidelity is natural, but I believe that if you truly love someone, you can stop yourself from doing the dirty deed." Not only is this funny and keeps the reader entertained but it also provides an interesting idea to ponder. What are the natural chemical things that bring about infidelity? Maybe you could talk about this more if you used this as your paper! Also, what are the things about love that would make someone NOT cheat? Just some ideas that could help you expand!
Ahh, The Irony
This blog was very interesting! You seem to know a lot about music and your opinion is very present! I think with some outsides sources this could make a great paper about the music industry and how it uses sexuality to make money! Afterall, sex sells! You have really good examples that everyone would know about and these really help prove your point. Your last paragraph is so true and that is definitely ironic! I'm sure you could find outsides sources to back up your great idea!
A Material World
Your view is very evident right from the get go and I like that! I like how you took the side of materialism, proving that it is actuall a good thing for society. Your discussion of how life would be boring with out materials is very intriguing and perhaps you could delve into that further if you used this as your essay! Bringing up the bad side of materialism really works for this paper because you use it explain how materials bring happiness to holidays that may otherwise be boring with out them. If you were to use this for your final paper I know you could find some outsides sources to back this up and make your paper stronger!
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