Deirdre: In your first blog I liked how you explained about Tannen first and then used her to segue into your main topic, communication. Your writing is very easy to read, as it flows well and you set things up nicely so the reader is not confused! The only thing I would suggest is maybe wrap up the ending/conclusion a little bit :) In your second blog I really liked your statement about Wright's essay making excuses for cheating and how it's like we're incapable of controlling ourselves. I agree that it is not out of our control! You did a great job concluding and I liked how you said you hoped our children wouldn't have to read about men and women making each other miserable in a future ENG215 class. Great writing this week!
Kayla: I liked how you summarized the essay at the beginning of your blog with out making it too long, just getting the points across. It really helps the reader focus on what points you are specifically going to discuss from the essay. Your example about your boyfriend was great! The second blog you wrote was great too! I really liked how you directlly addressed the question we were supposed to answer by using it as your thesis. How you built up to the thesis was really good too. You make a great point about how humans have the capability to have a lasting relationship with one person and this is what separates us from animals. I agree completely! My only suggesstion is to perhaps split your last sentence in your last paragraph into two sentences because it was a little bit of a run-on. Keep up the good writing!
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